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    dots Submission Name: Swollen Heart dots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    14/f/AK.
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 8/12/43
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 51
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 617



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    dotsSwollen Heart dots
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    Water quenches thy lips but nothing can cure the thirst I have for your kiss.

    Will it always be this way? isn't there anything I can do or say?

    To have your touch upon my skin would be everything to me but sin.

    Blood rushes through me just to hear you breathing.

    Hold me close and let me listen.

    The sweet song your heart chimes is beautiful,
    I wish i could have just one kiss.

    Forever and always I'm in this churning black water that floods my lunges. Forever and always.

    - I Love You.....




    Submitted on 2008-06-10 20:30:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good poem great poetry way to express feelings
    | Posted on 2008-06-11 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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