This is an excellent write that I feel speaks of infatuation instead of Love
Sometimes we as humans find it hard to distinguish between the two
Your last line is a perfect ending end sums up the whole write perfectly
Excellent Job!!!
God Bless
Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
I like the form you use and I think your content is very original. I like it.
I think your thoughts are a bit jumbled, though.
For example;
I couldn't suffocate
Because I lost the will to breath
I couldnt starve
Because the food tasted too sweet
the first one contradicts itself (If you're not breathing, you're suffocating) , and the second one doesn't (if you're starving, you're not eating) . I'm all for contradiction, I like using it in my writing a lot, but if you're going to use it, it should be consistent. Right now things just feel unpolished.
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