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When in your Company


Author: Car va g o
ASL Info:    35/M/NY
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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When in your Company



When in your company

My "love" I keep in check

As if a lunging Doberman pest,

In choker collar restraint,

Held tight by leash

With white knuckle grip

And leaning body weight.



This drooling beast,

Far too enthusiastic for you,

With his crude and eager affections

Is always met with alarm.

So I beat him down

To a broken bloody mess

Until the next time we meet

And his wounds are dressed.




Submitted on 2008-06-12 00:40:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeah, everyone wants Big Love till they get it.... then they want to [censored] they lose themselves in the relationship...

WhatEVER. I want big-dog big, I want a guy to fly in Avatar-style on one of those sky dragons....

Of course, the guy I'm seeing now has love like a hamster on a crocheted leash... I step on it everytime, just to end its misery. Who the [censored] can take a hamster seriously, you know?


Excellent write, tho.
| Posted on 2011-02-15 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  This style is rough around the edges. It isn't the kind of poetry that any high school teacher would be proud of, but in my opinion the rawness is what makes me like this write.

Cheers
Tom
| Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
  im thinking there may be a need for a little more punctuation in this because i cannot decide whether 'my love' is referring to a person or whether you are speaking of your love for this person... either is valid though.

i like the idea that you keep yourself [rather than your love] on a tight leash...
there are many times i find myself having to bite my tongue coz there are millions of things i want to say but none of them are appropriate or progressive... you know?

i like the intensity with which you/r love is being held back.... white knuckled... full weight...
as if restraint is almost too much...

and then, after the beating down and bloody pulp all we have left is puppy dog eyes...

sounds like interesting company to be in
| Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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