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    dots Submission Name: If the world ended today.dots
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    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       This poem sort of ties together my recent thoughts on my paranoia, and this story: http://abcnews.go.com/Blotter/story?id=5008225&page=1
    It got me thinking, if a nuclear holocaust did actually happen today, this Thursday, June 12, 2008, would I die happy?
    Would you?!


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    dotsIf the world ended today.dots
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    Thought I was cured of my sickness that kept me hanging when I needed to fall from fear
    Thought I'd leave behind my childish ways, but it's the only thing that keeps me here
    All I've ever heard was ridicule, not ever that it would be okay
    Undoubtedly what I hate most is what makes me want to stay
    But now the threat of death to all makes me wish I had gone through
    A single snap of a nuclear wrist makes the whole world fall, who knew?
    Perhaps I fear what I know nothing about, but it's nothing to take lightly
    They say paranoia is awareness but not when you're on the edge nightly
    But somehow knowing I'm not all there makes me feel complete
    Like solitude and dejection puts some people on their feet
    I know nothing of my fears, but I guess I'll just keep learning...

    So, if the world were to end today, would you die a happy person?




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      hang in there. poe
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really brilliant. I'm a bit paranoid myself but I never thought the world ending. Just another thing to add to my list. (Just joking, really.) I think I would die somewhat happy. I've achomplished many goals that I made when I was younger and thought they were impossible. Thank you for stretching my brain today, it's been a bit of a skull potatoe the past few days.

    *J*
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by wickedwoman | [ Reply to This ]
      I loveddddddddd this piece, Nikki. It made my heart pretty much jump thinking about all that you're feeling. The only thing that kind of caught me was the "not ever that it would be okay" line, but the rest was smooth and flowed perfectly. Loved the vocabulary. Love you! :D
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      your words were a little jumbled at first... but the meaning and excellence of this poem shined through towards the end. keep writing. i like the question at the end.
    ali
    | Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good Question, would I be happy if the world end today....nope cuz there's alot i feel I've not yet accomplished so I would die miserable. Really gets me thinking a very good write indeed

    BVG
    | Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]


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