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    dots Submission Name: Pertified Heartdots
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    Author: garnet4david
    ASL Info:    20/M/Indonesia
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 81/83/58
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 611



    Description:
       I would like to know whether this one is romantic or not, good or not. Any comments, recommendations, and critics are welcomed.
    The first paragraph is the people who are gossiping on us. She then thought about that and thought that age is our problem.


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    dotsPertified Heartdots
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    The summer crickets are chirping.
    Are they talking or singing?
    They are waiting in the bush,
    to ask questions about us.

    Yesterday, you tenderly told me,
    age is the burden of our love.
    Unless you can return my heart,
    i can never be able to give you up.

    You can walk away anytime,
    to leave our coupling untied.
    Without seeing your smile,
    my sweet dream seems diluted.

    You read each of my desires,
    all my wishes are to love you.
    Let the time dispell the curse,
    on your pertified heart.




    Submitted on 2008-06-12 22:02:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very Very Strong and filled with deep honest emotion
    To me you are referring tio 2 people who are deeply in Love but their Friends and perhaps family feel this relationship is all wrong
    My only advice my Friend is to go with your own Heart
    The Human Heart is the strongest organ in our body and if you allow it the Heart will guide you to not only the right choice but Happiness
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hm. This poem is pretty entertaining. As much as i hate to admit that i have been there and it hurts to talk about, i will say so. I would have to say that, to me, this poem gets the point across perfectly. it is poetic... something i doubt i could imitate because of this fact.
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]



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