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    dots Submission Name: Graduation Phasedots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 36/42/46
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGraduation Phasedots
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    It has been a crazy four years
    But now I don't know what to do with myself
    Where am I going to go in the mornings?
    Is there a place I can go to see you all there together?
    Will I ever see those smiles again?
    Can we just pretend that we'll see each other again next year?
    I am finding hard to let go
    After these years I spent trying to get away
    Has the defining moment come to pass?
    Is there any way I can make it last?
    Why is the dark slow to cast but the light so fast?
    Can I live in the past?
    Is it too late to ask for it all back?
    Or is it that I am too afraid of my next task?
    Too scared to walk that lonely path
    I'll miss how everyday there were new memories made
    And I'll try to never ever let them fade




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      Hm. you definitely captured what it feels like when you graduate. That whole scary, anxious, excited, terrified feeling.

    I found it fitting that this was mostly questions. The uncertain furture can produce nothing more than questions.

    Very good write. I would expand a little more with your description, but thats just me.

    :)
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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