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    dots Submission Name: You took it All, I need it backdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1071/601
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou took it All, I need it backdots
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    No one likes it when I get sad, then no boys want to kiss me
    And the editors say theres something missing
    I get a funny feeling in my side and breathing is a problem
    I need a rest, a bad nights sleep and I can't close my eyes just yet
    You have something inside you that belongs to me
    and its keeping me awake, it sings to me in my sleep

    I feel you in my stomach when I eat so I don't eat
    I feel you in my lungs when I breathe so I don't breathe
    I feel you in my brain when I work so I just cheat
    and I feel you in every room of my house so I just leave

    I don't get the songs you say remind you of me
    I'm not pretty, I'm not smart and I was never much good at anything
    So I can't really get over why you think you need something
    I mean, didn't you say you were glad I was going cause was such a bad girlfriend?
    Yea, you did, I remember, I am pretty sure

    I feel you in my stomach when I eat so I don't eat
    I feel you in my lungs when I breath so I don't breathe
    I feel you in my words when I speak so I don't say anything
    I feel you in my strength so now I act so weak
    I can't get over what you're taking from me, its everything

    I am not another broken hearted girl waiting
    I am stronger than you and on lucky boy number 13 and he is staying
    so leave me alone and give me back everything I own and just go home
    I miss when you always listened to me, that would make this easy

    I can't feel you anymore so I breathe free and I eat when I need to
    I can't hear you anymore so I sing what I like and do what I want to do
    I don't need you anymore because someone new loves me more than you do





    Submitted on 2008-06-13 02:51:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey and hi
    i have alwaz enjoyd reading yor posts
    this is as good as any other

    you put a good disgiuse on this so its not l;ike the usual breakup poem

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      what's up. poe
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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