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    dots Submission Name: Cinderelladots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 551
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsCinderelladots
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    She turns from ashes to lonely,
    She is no longer burnable.
    no longer fuel, no longer passionate,
    but as always hurt-able
    vertical lines sweep peacefully up,
    her slope and down through,
    and there with a kiss, she awaits,
    and hopes to crown you,
    she's found you worthy,
    and slips into glass slippers,
    Past hitter miss,
    And at last then get mad with her.
    her tiara is bright, with jewels,
    few have ever seen.
    some are missing,
    the two she needs to be a queen,
    the night of 360 days,
    passes as an hour,
    ponder if she's your white rose,
    or just another flower,
    but she is gone,
    the shoes are about to break,
    it's almost midnight,
    question: is she fake?






    Submitted on 2008-06-13 11:30:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My favorite lines were the first three:

    "She turns from ashes to lonely,
    She is no longer burnable.
    no longer fuel, no longer passionate"

    These lines set the tone for the whole piece, and I absolutely adore them. Its as if they made the ends of my nerves tingle with a familiar yet foreign sense.

    This was beautiful. I love the way you took a well known fairy tale and brought it into a new light with this poem. Its slightly sad, almost like you pity her and her "prince".

    Very very VERY well done.
    | Posted on 2008-06-13 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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