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    dots Submission Name: happilly ever afterdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotshappilly ever afterdots

    if i could show you
    all the things that are purple
    in me,
    letting the ocean hush
    be my breaths expulsion
    in the night,
    i would remind you
    of all the gentle sails
    like tiny buttons
    on your skin,
    nipping back
    the coolness
    into perfect heat.

    if my blood
    were the movement
    of fuschine flowers
    like the ones i curve
    between my autumn fingers
    inside the hollows of the evening,
    would it bring back
    the brightness
    of your eyes
    into my life?

    i've seen blue
    torn from above,
    throughout my years,
    with the certainty
    of atoms.
    but love...
    love has it's own dimension.
    & space & time
    have failed to find
    their purpose in this place.

    behind the world,
    things are hidden
    from our sight.
    i find hope in knowing
    that somewhere
    i will find you there
    with the brilliant
    fate of always
    in your heart.
    something that,
    happily ever after,
    you never planned for...

    Submitted on 2008-06-13 17:01:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The way you move a thought, a picture, an idea from one line into the next always amazes me. keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece although I view colors differently. I view purple as a violent color. Inside me it represents the violence of my past but each can build his own perception and understanding of nature. That's why I like poetry so much, I view it as a tool through which you can discover the world. And that's exactly what you've done here. By explaining something you actually learn yourself too when you define certain things that were a mere notion. Good write this one. I think you're one of the better poets on this site.
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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