Description: This is true you know. It makes me pissy, but I appreciate it.
On a Limb to Say My Piece -------------------------------------------
I feel the need to state my appreciation for a couple of things
I appreciate the memory of a band
that no longer exists
except on myspace
I've taken robiotics
they check my systems
they tell me the things that I don't know
and have no need to
and it cost me two hundred and seventy-two dollars for that information
so I pay them twenty-five dollars a month
to keep them satisfied
I appreciate the bills
I walk up and down the aisle all day
and sometimes I stand in one spot
so I can be productive
the company makes sure I have a pad to stand on for my back
i go to the break room and I have water there and Tupperware
full of peaches
and a role in my locker
and an mp3 player in my ear like a car stereo for ears
I appreciate my job
sometimes i see my friend and he tells me I am stupid now
he tells me I am awful now
he tells me he likes to talk to me but he doesn't like the things I say
I appreciate companionship
I want it all
I want to be healthy and wealthy and thin
I want to have riches and bitches and men
I want it all
but I have nothing without appreciation
as sad and unfair as it is
it is true
yours does too
That band was just a bunch of losers posing for photos.
This made me laugh. I can feel the sarcasm, which I guess translates to satire. If it's true that this is how you feel and you actually do appreciate it... well why satire? I can understand, but at the same time I don't.
"I appreciate the bills" feels more sarcastic than "I appreciate my job", but I can understand how it is/could be sincere.
"and an mp3 player in my ear like a car stereo for ears" I suggest removing "like". Or redoing it, "and an mp3 player like a car stereo in my ears". I think I dislike the same word being in the same line or sentence more than I dislike "like".
Your friend sounds like a sorry ass.
I can't agree with some of the poem, I don't want riches and [censored]es and men, but you tell me(reader) I do on line 30 "you do". I don't really want to be wealthy. I want to be healthy and happy and have a couple of [censored]es. This paragraph is meant as humor and fails miserably, sorry.
I really am not sure how one can have nothing without appreciation. You can, it's just a bit less enjoyable. Since enjoyment is an emotional thing, it can't be unfair because it comes from the individual. If the individual doesn't enjoy the things they have without appreciating them, then the person would be likely to appreciate the things without thinking "I have to start appreciating this widget so I can enjoy myself".
I understand it's a simple statement poem. There are my thoughts to it. Now a few typos (I think)
?-"robiotics" I kept trying to figure out what you meant and I just realized you were referring to "probiotics". Correct? If not, what is/are "robiotics"?
-"and a role in my locker", if the bread variety of food, I'm guessing you meant "roll"