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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Xillie
    ASL Info:    16/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 2/5/10
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 64
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 507



    Description:
       Simple. self explaitory.


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    dotsLovedots
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    Love

    Do I deserve this?
    Where did I go right?
    Was it when it hurt so bad…
    Just to say “Good Night”?

    Maybe it’s all in my head
    Maybe it’s not true
    Maybe you don’t exist
    Although I’m sure you do

    Why is it that when you hurt
    My heart is crying too?
    Every time you call
    I’ll be here for you

    What is this feeling?
    A gift from above?
    What ever it is
    Can I call it Love?




    Submitted on 2008-06-14 21:20:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A very simply put poem with your feelings clearly etched out in each line. It projects a lot of innocence and simplitude as well.

    -best stanza
    "Why is it that when you hurt
    My heart is crying too?
    Every time you call
    I’ll be here for you"

    u started out pretty nicely Xillie....in the proper way of realting your feelings, emotions, or whatever it might be in ur poetry. You'll go a long way girl!

    -KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
    -OB
    :)>
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]



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