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    dots Submission Name: Blame Won't Changedots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 575
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    Bytes: 1971

       I don't know if this is going to fit into a book of poems, fuck the books though. I write this one for me.

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    dotsBlame Won't Changedots

    Lift your chin up
    Don't be such a puss
    Pain takes time to heal
    Don't make such a fuss

    Don't be such a baby
    You fucking hypocrit
    You know you hurt her first
    You deserve what you get

    You aren't so fucking special
    You have no divine grace
    You led yourself to hell
    And hell you'll have to face

    So quit wishing for tomorrow
    For it may never come
    Your dreams are simply foolish
    You don't deserve such fun

    You try to act all innocent
    Like you didn't see your fate
    Like it took you by surprise
    And you noticed it too late

    You knew this would happen
    Don't be such a fool
    You played a game of chance
    You, yourself, the tool

    You took for granted what you had
    You know you wanted more and more
    You tried to change her just a tad
    Forgot what you changed her for

    You created this lack of bliss
    You created this hurt
    You anted up and took a risk
    You got what you deserved

    Now don't try to act innocent
    Don't be so naive
    You can fool others, not yourself
    The truth is clear to me

    Your actions were rash and reasons transparent
    The veil you used is flawed
    Don't just think, try and be coherent
    Watch who you point the fault

    Blame is so easily transferred
    Because it's always a partial thing
    But you have just as much as her
    You have no right to weight the blame

    So get over your problems
    It's so non productive
    To live in the past
    The depression's not worth it

    Quit pointing fingers
    Because your luck fell through
    This was bound to happen
    And now it happened to you

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