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    dots Submission Name: Its Time To Grow Updots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1072/602
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Seems like I've been here before, it feel so familiar
    On the edge of breaking you in two and I feel like there isn't much left to do but cut a few strings and just let you go
    I've walked down this road and it always brings me home alone
    And I go watch Vh1 or I just sit there on my own but I don't ever call, and you don't ever call
    Oh, aren't we just so strong

    It would be dangerous to let you know how much I need you
    How much I love your crazy hair and the sound of your voice
    It'd be insane to tell you how I feel, it would make this real
    and I have never been good at being serious, not with us, and not with anyone
    I'm barely seventeen and this is 21 and up

    When you sit there, I can only stare and thats not good enough
    I know it
    You're not saying anything but thats ok, I hate every word you say anyway

    I've been here before, on the edge of wanting only you and not being able to ask
    I've seen this picture before, its about to end way too fast
    I'm about to crash and burn, you're about to remember my bad reputation
    But I don't want this to be like every other time, you're not every other guy

    Its time to for this little girl to grow up
    All those boys thought they'd last forever but you told me you wouldn't take no for an answer
    And that was finally enough
    When you sit there, I can only stare and thats not good enough
    I know it
    You're not saying anything but thats ok, I hate every word you say anyway

    Its my problem, not your problem
    That I can't fix myself in one easy step and its ok, I'll solve this
    Its time for this little girl to grow up
    I love you, its enough




    Submitted on 2008-06-15 03:16:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tis true to pin all of you on one man.
    (I'm a hypocrite, tis me too)

    But I see in this work Potential.
    I loved this line
    "When you sit there, I can only stare and thats not good enough
    I know it
    You're not saying anything but thats ok, I hate every word you say anyway"
    The repitition of it definatly added to the peice...

    All In All good write

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I Really Really Liked This!!!
    Though Very Sad you showed us your Readers that life can and will go on after a breajkup
    If I was understanding your words correctly you were 17 and he was 21
    My Friend trust me you have your whole life to find Mr Right and to be Honest I can tell from your words this was not Mr. Right
    Please look deep at the lessons learned from this relationship and let them carry your Heart to the next one
    I can see you have a Very Strong Heart and a Loving Heart
    Please dont ever lose that because that my Friend is the single strongest asset you will ever have in life!!!
    I will be Praying for you
    Please remain Strong!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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