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    dots Submission Name: Nymphomaniac (unfinished)dots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1072/602
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNymphomaniac (unfinished)dots
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    I think I always knew I'd be a nymphomaniac
    Something in me felt too empty
    And it used to click against my ribs, hollowed out and caving
    Every time they said "I need you"
    And I said I needed them too
    But they weren't liars and I was
    What a tragic story, what a broken hearted ending

    I guess I feel sorry for the girls that had to follow me
    What a fucking pity, I am fucking pity
    What am I saying, I am as miserable as you are
    And I am too selfish to be sorry

    I think I always knew I'd find you someday
    There had to be something real in all the plastic and paper
    Had to be someone worth waiting for
    But above it all, I needed to fall
    And now I can't find a way to tell you what I am
    And I didn't give a damn until I started living you





    Submitted on 2008-06-15 03:33:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fist of all, there is no such thing as a nymphomaniac. There are much better and older words to describe that. Second of all you should really work on your overall scheme. The piece feels to scattered in some parts.
    And third, girl what's your number? :D
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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