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    dots Submission Name: Oh Great motherfucking Goddots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsOh Great motherfucking Goddots

    I would define my character otherwise
    if they were my words coming from your mouth
    I would use substantial
    rather than?
    what was the word you use?
    I still think these things are full of tasty pieces of piles and piles and piles of


    I bet that surprised you none
    and I bet you expected that

    it is kind of the point

    I expected shit from the mouth as well
    and it came in glorious hot mounds of stench and sourness

    It makes my stomach feel disgusting to talk this way
    does it to you?
    If it makes you uncomfortable why don't you just stop it altogether then, and I will
    and then we might not be in a warehouse
    full of shit

    It makes much more sense to say what we mean
    and then again the thought occurs to me that might be the case
    in this case

    oh great motherfucking god I would hope not

    Submitted on 2008-06-15 10:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's interesting. I won't venture to guess what it is about.
    You label it satire, but I'm not picking up on how it is such. I just looked it up. I had the wrong definition in mind. I can see how this is satire.

    So, displeased with someone who apparently treats you poorly purposely or otherwise.

    "It makes my stomach feel disgusting to talk this way
    does it to you?"
    This suggests the speaker/author doesn't enjoy being mean and as such doesn't enjoy writing or saying what is written here. Which means it comes as a late recourse.

    "oh great mother[censored] god I would hope not"
    You mean what you are writing, but you don't want to. Or you think you don't mean what you're writing and you hope you're right about that.

    I could be all wrong about this, but any interpretation I would make would be personal, which is unnecessary here.

    It wasn't funny to me, but it isn't terrible. Spelling is all well.
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by Sir Jimeth | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha I LOVE this piece!

    You're hilarious in a seriously pissed kinda way.

    | Posted on 2008-06-15 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]

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