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    dots Submission Name: Why I Hate Naturedots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots Why I Hate Naturedots

    sun playing between
    kelly green leaves;
    cold river rushing between
    bare legs.

    skin scraping sharp

    my feet plunging deep between
    slick and wet, under the current
    nipping at me as I slide stuck between

    leafy-green giggles,
    limbs entrenched in muddied water;
    sharp shallow breaths,
    lovers laughing
    their skin on skin slipping smooth between
    water and rocks and me and breathing,

    sucking me in deeper, blowing breeze cool between
    my sun-hot face
    and . . .

    my young son says,
    "Those people are naked. Thank god we're upstream from his sperm"

    "Thank God," I gasp.

    My legs are bleeding.

    Submitted on 2008-06-15 13:04:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      gave me a good laugh, especially the last line - well done!

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      gorgeous. really, really gorgeous. i adore the ending. you are brilliant.
    | Posted on 2008-06-15 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]

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