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    dots Submission Name: the compass of your heartdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe compass of your heartdots
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    i pace a lot in my sleep
    because my tendency
    to placate
    runs so deep.
    i tend to open doors
    that i've already walked through before
    & left behind.

    i'm not sure
    what i'm going through
    at the moment.
    i move from one story
    of my life
    to the next
    with very little time
    to reflect.

    if only people
    were mirrors.
    i still see myself in you all.
    i'm just not sure
    what i look like
    anymore
    from the outside
    where it counts.

    can one love
    habitually?
    & if so,
    is that a bad thing?
    there are two sides
    to every hand though.
    so we have a choice
    between the fist
    & the open palm.

    i see you
    in some inside part of myself
    that keeps rising to the surface
    after every cyclic sinking.
    i guess
    what i'm trying to say
    is that i'll do my best
    to keep moving
    into the compass of your heart
    with my own.

    we'll see where it leads us.




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    ||| Comments |||
      "if only people
    were mirrors."

    See ? this is what I've noticed in your work. You tend to see only yourself in it. People are mirrors of our own insecurities, crooked mirrors from a theme park, because each one of them is viewing you differently. You should not trust them my friend. If you really want to find yourself you need to dig deep inside. Find the monster that is zero and fall through him. What you project into this world are lies, we all do that, the truth lies inside us, hidden even from ourselves.
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I can see where you're coming from and these lines made me stop and re-read them

    "if only people
    were mirrors.
    i still see myself in you all.
    i'm just not sure
    what i look like
    anymore
    from the outside
    where it counts."

    they're Beautiful. It makes so much sense to me.

    It was a good read.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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