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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The earth is tired of you
    stepping on it and so it is insolently stubborn
    and insists on keeping you inside
    when you should be trodding upon
    grasses of brilliant green in the heart of june
    and instead of being twitterpated or engaging in twitterpation or twitterpating
    (I don't know, I just like the word) but really instead of that, our hearts are frozen over
    because they think it's winter and they think
    we should be lonely, alone, lonesome, solitary
    but really earth, it's summer
    and my windshield is frozen in the morning time
    and really, that shouldn't happen
    really I should be twitterpated and not writing this poem inside with an almost empty soul
    really I should be full of warm words
    so warm that they bake together inside of me
    become a toasty mass
    so that come winter,
    I won't ever be alone




    Submitted on 2008-06-16 03:08:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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