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    dots Submission Name: All Alonedots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.88 - 253/248/195
    Words: 459
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 92
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2642



    Description:
       This song is actually a country song (believe it or not). It's not about one person,
    a lot of people where put in this. Some people say some of my poems and songs
    don't have any feeling to it or doesn't have enough detail. I hope this is enough
    this time.

    Dedications: D.B. Puppy D.G.


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    dotsAll Alonedots
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    I did a lot of things that I'm not proud of.
    I did a lot of things that was wrong.
    The thing that I regret the most,
    Is when I left you alone.
    It cut my heart into pieces
    I did what I had to do back then.
    But the thing I wish the most right now
    Is for you to hold me in your arms again.
    Like you did when I was sad
    Like you did when I was scared.
    Like when you wiped the tears off my face
    And showed me you really cared.
    And I want to see you again
    And I'm here all alone.
    I want to hear your voice in my ear
    But I'm afraid to pick up the phone.

    If you could really see
    The thoughts going through my mind
    You'd hold me in your arms again
    You'd know I'd want you to be mine.
    But I can't tell you how I feel
    If I don't pick up the phone
    And because I had to tell you goodbye
    I'll stay here all alone.

    It just get so hard sometimes
    When I see you with another girl
    It's hard for me to let go of
    The person who rocked my world.
    It hurt so much inside
    When I see your face.
    It reminds me of all the times we had
    And memories I'll never erase.
    I remember the first time I kissed you
    You seemed scared to kiss me first.
    You were walking me to class
    I thought my heart was going to burst.
    Or the first time I said I loved you
    My heart was beating so fast.
    You told me that you loved me too
    I wished that moment had last.

    If you could really see
    The thoughts going through my mind
    You'd hold me in your arms again
    You'd know I'd want you to be mine.
    But I can't tell you how I feel
    If I don't pick up the phone
    And because I had to tell you goodbye
    I'll stay here all alone.

    I hate the fact that my mind
    Is stuck in the past.
    I wish it all could come back,
    It seems like it went by so fast.
    But I still remember all of it,
    Your hand caressing my face.
    And the more I think of you
    I long for your embrace.
    When I start to think of you
    I want to do so many things.
    Like the day I snuck out the house
    For our date on the swings.
    When I sat there and you pushed me
    Was the most fun I've had in so long.
    All I have left of you are memories
    I can't believe they're all gone.




    Submitted on 2008-06-16 08:05:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow, i think this definetly had feeling. I can just feel your anguish. i wish i could put it to the tune you gave it. But it was great nontheless.

    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]


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