blind retort

Author: diamondmind Elite Ratio:    8 - 15 /5 /2 Words: 23

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blind retort

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I just want to sit here, wrapped in ice and smoke, and whisper, and release breaths that make me shiver inside myself...

Submitted on 2008-06-16 16:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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shiver inside myself denying anyone's help noone to trust for a hand all reach out to give demands before doing a good deed help only comes from the gread thanks for commenting on my poem

| Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]

what does anyone know of ... um... discombobulations and the sound of forever humming though your ears as if this was perchance the rhythm and devotion of feeling as if life had a goddamn purpose type with one eye closed it's an unpleasant situation

| Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]

This write to me is a sad write explaining the dangers of drug abuse I may be wrong but that is the feeling I get from this I have been through this pain myself and now Thank God I am sober going on 3 years If I am right on my assumption Please get some Help as I Promise you there is Help ourt there if you really want it Excellent Job!!! Though short you immediately got right to the point Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

moments that pass with sleeting sideways glance s intoxicate me. i love poems that catch them, that's what i try to do now. like catching shadows. very nice little piece, i hope you write more. very very nice. it one of those that just gets better every time you reread it. :) ~shadow

| Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

I think I've been there. Well, that is, assuming that I haven't misunderstood your piece. To me, this puts me back in that moment when I want to radiate beauty and to create something that matters but there seems to be no fire that is lit inside me so whatever it is that I produce has no power or demanding weight. Given that solidification, I think that the title works well.

| Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

your words bring a curiosity as to where you might be, what you might be thinking... i am having trouble with the title of the poem, the sense of sight does not seem to have much to do with the words you've shared. sometimes, the more abrupt the thought, the more difficult it is to understand the true message. no matter, your words contain a real intricacy. well done. tony

| Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by wonderbread1000 | [ Reply to This ]

oooh, nice! short but rich. love line 2. terrific work here. peace, love and all that other junk, joe

| Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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