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    dots Submission Name: I miss you.dots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 10/20/52
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 81
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1006



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    dotsI miss you.dots
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    Can you breathe? can't you see? My love is strong for you, but my heart is weak.

    The temptation of your skin rattles my spine. My tongue binds itself when you're near, I want to call you mine.

    I know you see me, I can feel your eyes burn into me when i walk away.

    Holding myself back is a great pain I wish to quit and a sorrow I want to stop.

    My dreams are only of you. I wish what I am feeling couldn't be true.

    I can't think of anything but you. I'm sorry. I'm sorry I won't be with you, most fairy tales don't come true. I'm sorry i can't breathe without your voice, I'm not away from you by choice.

    I count the steps you take, Turning away from you is my worst mistake.

    I wish you could hold me, after all, that's what you told me, When i was sick with dreams and heavy sleep.

    My heart is yours to keep.




    Submitted on 2008-06-17 02:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounds as if you want something ....a lot......overall, you expressed yourself very well, and was very clear........i liked it......keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Blackphoenix14 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very well-written poem, and it provokes many feelings in me. Even though this is written from a female perspective, I can still apply it to myself and situations that I have been in. This poem is just beautiful.
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by thehappypill | [ Reply to This ]


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