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    dots Submission Name: A Soldier Stole My Heartdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    17/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 251/238/190
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 116
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1873



    Description:
       i started this a long time ago. it was orginally titled I fell in love with a korean boy, but the korean boy went off to basic training a while ago.


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    dotsA Soldier Stole My Heartdots
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    You saw me at the worst time of my life,
    So much going on.
    Felt my pain, shared my laughs with me,
    Sung my favorite song.
    But you're so far away right now,
    I don't know where you are.
    My soldier has disappeared,
    He's gone away so far.

    I fell in love with a Korean boy
    singing greenday
    He stole my heart and ran with it
    He took my heart away.
    Now because of him my heart is
    Going away to war.
    If he was going to take it anyway
    What did I need it for?

    How I wish that my soldier would come home
    I think about you every night.
    My sweet corporal in the army
    I hope you're alright.
    It's hard for me keep going on
    I miss you so.
    I don't know why feel so lost
    Where did you go?

    I fell in love with a Korean boy
    singing greenday
    He stole my heart and ran with it
    He took my heart away.
    Now because of him my heart is
    Going away to war.
    If he was going to take it anyway
    What did I need it for?

    And I hope Iraq is nice to you
    So you can come back to me.
    That soon you'll be able to come back home
    In the place you need to be.
    I hope you come back in one piece
    With a smile on your face.
    I've known you for far too long
    And I have no more time to waste.

    I fell in love with a Korean boy
    singing greenday
    He stole my heart and ran with it
    He took my heart away.
    Now because of him my heart is
    Going away to war.
    If he was going to take it anyway
    What did I need it for?
    What would I need my heart for,
    After a soldier stole my heart?






    Submitted on 2008-06-17 10:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is an absolutely beautiful song with very meaningful lyrics that flow nicely.. The rhyming scheme throughout is very well written and I love the images it paints in my mind.. The only suggestion I could make would be for the last line as it feels redundant with the line before it and doesn't seem to fit the rhyming scheme in the rest of the song.. I would maybe say:

    "after a soldier took it away"

    rather than

    "after a soldier stole my heart"

    as that would make it fit better as the ending of the song, but That's just my thoughts on it..

    -Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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