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    dots Submission Name: Acceptancedots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 875
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 679



    Description:
       this was going to be a song kind of thing but it kind of just turned into a bunch of lines that got thrown together. Umm any help on improving it would be apperciated. Thanks and enjoy.


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    dotsAcceptancedots
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    Iím not some homiscidal, suicidal freak,
    Iím just a girl in the world,
    Lookiní for love in the light of the future,
    While dwelling in the darkness of the past.

    You may hate me,
    Well hate me all you want to.
    Thatís not gonna change me.

    You may want me,
    Well want me all you want to,
    I ainít gonna want you back.

    You may love me,
    Well thereís something I should tell you,
    Iím afraid of loviní again.

    You may think that Iím crazy
    Well to tell you the thruth
    I am.

    Acceptance is key




    Submitted on 2008-06-17 21:39:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like your style. simple, straight forward. it's really nice to be able to see the emotion without loosing the content. and you are right. acceptence is the key, sadly not many see that though.
    | Posted on 2008-12-17 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it.

    I thought it was good, very honest.
    | Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]


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