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    dots Submission Name: The Last Standing.dots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    18, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 22/49/41
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 125
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1233



    Description:
       A 'letter' I wrote to someone. A boy no doubt. Anyway, Read.

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    dotsThe Last Standing.dots
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    Dear,

    What are you waiting for?
    Do you hope that one day I will
    wake and not care?
    That won't happen.

    This is real,
    whether you realize it or
    You don't. It is, what it is.
    I stand for you.

    Gather your man-hood
    and run,
    just like the coward that you
    are.

    I won't judge you,
    but then again,
    have I
    ever?

    What you don't see here,
    is what you've wanted,
    and what I want.
    You won't take it.

    Suit yourself.
    Only time will find you
    another whore to
    ruin your life.

    Do you really know how
    good you had it
    with me?
    I don't think so.

    When you wake up and
    find yourself without me,
    I'll wake up and find myself,
    with someone worth caring for.

    Will you want me then? You may,
    or you may walk alone through what
    I would have went through
    with you.

    Love Always, -

    Scratch that.

    Dear -,
    You're an idiot.
    With Love, -




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    ||| Comments |||
      "The Last Standing" A good title, strong, to the point and well written.... I liked it alot col13x
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      You say you won't judge him but you called him a coward. The ending was amusing too. I love the fifth stanza it was worth a second and third glance. Much to be savored here.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by ArchusMuta | [ Reply to This ]
      I LOVED it. There is emotion in it, yet the end had abit of a funny twist to it. Very nice!
    | Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by BigDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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