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    dots Submission Name: clever ghostsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsclever ghostsdots

    darling starling:
    the inside of my knowing
    is for your own hands alone.
    the slow river
    clothes our path
    towards a blue always.

    some fiery heaven awaits
    in the pink aftermath
    of summer.
    but this is where i met you,
    beneath the odd moon
    of our beginning.

    if i could remain red
    in the nude wind
    for you,
    i would be haunting
    & i'd crowd
    my clever ghosts about you
    in your sleep.

    the arms of perfect trees
    are remembering you
    the way that the ash does.
    & where the airy mix
    of honey meets my lips,
    i've found a place
    for ivory flesh
    to tremble in the night.

    Submitted on 2008-06-18 11:06:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This is great stuff. My admiration for your poetic soul. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2009-12-15 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is gorgeous. I wish I could think of something more to say, but I canít think of how this could be improved.

    I love it as it is.
    | Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]

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