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    dots Submission Name: In The Valley Of The Shadow Of Deathdots

    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185/164/70
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsIn The Valley Of The Shadow Of Deathdots

    Dressed in black, waiting by someoneís grave
    A misrepresented individual that no one gave
    Any reason to breathe, no chance to speak
    To communicate the pressure of what they see
    Live through these words if you can relate
    To feeling overwhelmed by what it takes
    To make it in this world, to live, to please
    Anyone around you, to be part of society

    Who am I, Iím just a mortal man
    A project for the living, I am damned
    Called to save the wicked, this is what I am
    A project for the living, I am damned

    Turned away by love, Iíve been led to this
    Death has been there waiting with a kiss
    Deathís open arms are cold, but theyíre still there
    I get locked in a stare, cold as I am, Iím still aware
    That this is a passing phase will never suffice
    Cause living among the damned has itís price
    So never second guess if I ever really cared
    Iíve sold my soul to the devil to keep you prepared

    Who am I, Iím just a mortal man
    A project for the living, I am damned
    Called to save the wicked, this is what I am
    A project for the living, I am damned

    Donít look at me like Iím a prophet
    Donít cling on to me for my words
    Iím just a mortal, a common man and i
    Will meet my fate when it is my time

    Who am I, Iím just a mortal man
    A project for the living, I am damned
    Called to save the wicked, this is what I am
    A project for the living, I am damned

    I cling to the darkness more each passing day
    ĎCause sooner or later everything will fade
    As death greets me warm, i long for change
    Cause my music and my sadness are one in the same

    (Iím in the valley of the shadow of death)
    Weakness sets in as I cling to each passing breath
    (Iím in the valley of the shadow of death)
    Second guessing if Iím ready for what comes next
    (Iím in the valley of the shadow of death)
    Clinging to what could be my final breath
    (Iím in the valley of the shadow of death)
    Clinging to what could be my final breath

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      This kinda sounds like I song I'd have on repeat It ties everything together very well and though it has very dark outlining, it doesn't overpower the meaningful inner structure. It all balances out in the end. Very very nice
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      "a project for the living, I am damned". Very strong imagery here, I like it.

    The whole piece spoke in a very "gather together" sort of way for me. It felt as if it were a rally call for all the lost misguided souls in the world.
    I agree with the prior comments that it feels dark, but I don't think it could be anything else but dark.

    Great lyrics my friend.
    | Posted on 2008-06-21 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      lol good write, I was looking for coolio
    thought he was stalking elite skills rofl

    anyways, I like these lyrics they have a certain vibe to them, a tad dark, but they have a sense of solidarity, I wish I could play some beats and rap this but Im at work, sounds good in my head though, good work.
    | Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      These were fantastic lyrics! Wish I could hear the music. :) I can relate to this very well. You did a magnificent job. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Dark and honest---anyone who things he/she always fits perfectly in society is only fooling him/herself. I can't believe I'm the first to comment; you certainly wrote these lyrics much better than I would be able to do.

    Because I only caught one typo, I'll mention it.
    Line 18: "has itís price" should be "has its price"

    | Posted on 2008-06-18 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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