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    dots Submission Name: Nymphomaniacdots
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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 173
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    I think I always knew I was addicted to you
    And it was unhealthy
    I had trouble breathing
    But it was just impossible, completely irresponsible
    And you pushed me in too deep
    And now I'm a fucking freak

    You wanted to be my first
    and whats worse
    was I wanted to be yours
    We were both just impossible

    All the words falling through my arms have me
    Falling apart in all the right pieces
    And everything I wanted isn't very much more
    Than the wind in my face and someone new to meet
    I think I always knew I'd be a nympho
    Something inside me felt too empty
    And maybe I knew you'd never be the one
    Something in me just felt too empty

    You wanted to be my first
    and whats worse
    I wanted to be yours
    We were just impossible

    You wanted to be my first
    and its worse, cause you weren't
    and you can't even be my second or third
    Its simply impossible






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      I like the cruel twist at the ending...
    | Posted on 2008-07-08 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      Filling and filling and filling, trying to cram enough of something into that space that only this person could occupy. Just so you'll stop feeling hollow. Sex, food, music, stuff...

    ... Yeah.

    You wanted to be my first
    and its worse, cause you weren't
    and you can't even be my second or third
    Its simply impossible


    And there's a lack of punctuation at the end of that--like the thought just keeps moving through space....
    ~
    | Posted on 2008-06-25 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]


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