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Submission Name: fireworks dots

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Author:	sadtrapofgravit
ASL Info:	103.f.wa
Elite Ratio:	7.2 - 178/167/66
Words:	51

Class/Type:	Poetry/Legend
Total Views:	111
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	385

Description:
Another old(er) one.

21 May

... Yeah... Dunno. Shit for words lately. Hm...

fireworks dots

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I want to break childhood
against bended knee,
where ringletted,
pigtailed dreams
are abandoned
in ways no one
else understands.

If I could measure so surely,
the way she did,
the way she does,
I would have no need
for these binoculars, which today
do nothing but examine
history books.

Submitted on 2008-06-19 01:29:31 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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break childhood against bended knee... a very agressive opening right there. i only remember getting a hiding once and it was from my uncle who majorly over reacted and got in huge amounts of sh!t from my dad when he found out...

theres something about childhood that ought to be broken... something that already is broken and things along the way that will be broken...

i dont know about yours but i sure know that my childhood wasnt one of those idyllic, responsibility-free ones... parents marrying millions of times and alcohol and broken windows and arguements all over the place... that whole perfect serenity of childhood idea needs to be smashed. i doubt many, if any, experience the myth that is childhood though we all manage to be able to look back at moments and fairytale them up... add the ringlets and piggy tails and beautify them... kinda like an undertaker of memories i guess...

hmmm... rambling...

binoculars through history books... sounds intense and i think ill pass that option up.
see... i am a hoarder of memories [both good and bad]. my little sister is a hoarder of stuff... she needs [and gets] every single thing she asks for and most of it is broken and useless after a coupla weeks/months but me... ive stored away every moment possible... songs my father has sung to me... conversations had while sitting on the edge of cliffs... those drunken lectures where moments of 'i love you' slip out of a proud fathers lips... walking miles and ending up nowhere countless times... ive got them all saved up [and one day they will become poetic im sure] but i dont think i would want to scour and pore over them because it is then that the ugliness and reality of those moments shines through and well... soem things are best left morticianed... yeah?

whole lot going on in my mind coz of this piece girl...
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