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    dots Submission Name: Temple of the Jaguardots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1039/1113/532
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots Temple of the Jaguardots
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    Along the high plateau the rivers drain
    Into the pale pellucid quiet lakes.
    Here golden vipers hide within the breaks
    As smaller rivers wind across the plain.
    One ruined temple in the greening cane
    Home to the jaguar and a nest of snakes,
    Yet in the autumn moonlight there awakes
    A sad and sallow ghost from out this fane.

    She walks among the stones beneath the stars,
    And weeps for all that was, and what is gone.
    Slim shafts of moonlight stream like silver bars,
    She often sighs so softly, yet so long,
    Though fails to conjure up her avatars,
    And so she walks until the amber dawn.




    Submitted on 2008-06-19 08:43:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the title to this! This is rich with excellent word pictures, and one feels sad for the lonely enchantress' ghost that dwells here. Ancient ruins in a forgotten jungle, home to the ghost of an ancient maiden and the fierce and solitary Jaguar! Can't get more picturesque than that!

    Excellent work, my very talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      You have the ability to paint a picture with words and encourage a yearning to know the story beyond the portrait. You've created a landscape and a filmy aparation. I just wish, you'd go further and build the background of the tale.

    Take care, Ash.
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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