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    dots Submission Name: I am drowningdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i don't know what to do with a man i don't love and his baby inside of me


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    dotsI am drowningdots
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    I open my eyes,
    and try to see.
    Looking for: what's ahead of me.
    And i'm found drowning...

    I cringe in pain,
    and weep in hurt:
    for the one i love,
    who still needs birth.
    I'm terrified...

    I don't love him;
    when he loves me: unconditionally.
    And i'm sorry:
    for the pain that he will feel,
    because we were ignorant.

    I am crumbling into pieces,
    and i don't know where,
    they all are.
    I am nothing more than anything;
    this life will not go far...
    in my head.

    I am teetering on top,
    of my hill.
    Do i roll back,
    or will i just fall?
    To a pit of dispair,
    or a streak of good luck?
    I am drowning in tears;
    of it all...
    so i stop.

    Thinking and wishing,
    i could take it all back:
    if i try hard enough.
    If try...
    at all.
    Knowing nothing can stop it.

    You're comming my way;
    sitting in your cacoon.
    You are swimming,
    and blinking,
    heart beating as it should.
    Why'd you pick me?

    Got to work in a bit;
    take a walk with your dad.
    Oh how it all makes me,
    feel lonely and sad.
    I am drowing...
    In my tears.
    Life is driving me,
    where i don't want to steer..
    Sitting in my corner,
    of this car.

    I had nothing but hurt,
    and pain in my life.
    And i know you'll be diffrent,
    for you will be mine.
    But i want us alone:
    me and you,
    just the two.
    But you'll hate me forever....
    wont you?




    Submitted on 2008-06-19 13:01:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am Positive your unborn child will not hate you
    You are just feeling some feelings and thoughts that are actually quite normal in pregnancy
    I actually think it is healthy that you are thinking the way you are because you are thinking of your unborn childs well being and that my Friend Truthfully shows you do care and only want the best for him or her
    I will be Praying for you both

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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