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    dots Submission Name: invisible butterflydots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 514
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1317



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    dotsinvisible butterflydots
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    with you,
    it's like i'm trying to catch
    an invisible butterfly
    flickering through the chambers
    of my heart.
    something so allusive
    to those without slow hands
    to hush the blood
    that haunts you.

    but i've known
    this perfect slipping
    like no other.
    it moves around
    the insides
    of haunted clocks
    like an ice floe
    through a river
    that moves us on.

    i feel the blue
    of years
    that crowd amongst me
    disappear beside you
    while we sleep.
    my nerves become birds
    that rest
    in golden moments
    on your chest.

    it feels as if
    the tragedy of seconds
    no longer needs us
    when you're near.
    i'm trying to describe
    something new,
    something words
    will never quite remember.
    it feels as though
    i'm haunted
    by your touch.

    there's some memory
    that holds us in our bond
    as if we were
    somehow moving backwards
    through the sands of time
    to some hidden place
    that awaits us
    in some happily ever after future
    that we never planned for
    down the line.




    Submitted on 2008-06-20 04:48:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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