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    dots Submission Name: A Crumbled Thronedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1039/1113/532
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsA Crumbled Thronedots
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    I heard the werewolf’s wanton call
    Rebound across the tree lined plain,
    And down the ruined palace hall
    Where only crownless ghosts now reign.

    And that lycanthrope’s curse would sprawl
    Round oaks and elms in that domain,
    Their echoes like a brooding pall
    To summon royalty long slain.

    Now shadows on the palace wall
    Move like some subtle, awful stain
    Across those floors out to the mall
    The waiting ghosts to entertain.

    And when the Moon’s pale silver light
    Renews those shadows once again
    Once more the dreadful Court of Night
    Is summoned by the icy rain.

    Grey werewolves come to howl and brawl,
    Until the dawn they will remain
    The very stars to so appall
    Until the evil shadows wane.

    Now each night pallid ghosts install
    In their great court so overgrown,
    With fanfare and a ghostly ball
    A new king on their crumbled throne.

    I heard the werewolf’s wanton call
    Rebound across the tree lined plain,
    And down the ruined palace hall
    Where only crownless ghosts now reign.




    Submitted on 2008-06-20 07:26:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes this was excellent, really got my imagination ticking

    Brian
    | Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent! A brooding, foreboding lycantrophic tale which would raise the hackles of even superheroes! There is no image quite so eerie to me as that of the Werewolf! A delightful read! Well and ably done, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was mindblowing! The imagery was exellent, your sentence structure is unique, the first stanza really grabs your attention, and you use such fantastic words (wanton, brooding, appall, etc.). Not only that, this poem is so original and exciting, and I loved the way you repeated the first stanza at the end, it really pulled the whole thing together. I can't wait to read more of your work.
    | Posted on 2008-06-20 00:00:00 | by deadbeat_88 | [ Reply to This ]


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