well since this is a short ass poem there isn't much way
that i can make a long comment. though this poem is simple, understandable since it's a children's poem.
so um, it doesn't suck as you've said, though you might want to put more work into it, what exactly is really up to you but this seems more like you're talking to someone next to you than a poem, but again it's a rant so i guess all in all you did well.
Submission Name: Mandatory, Obligatory, Bullshit
