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    dots Submission Name: Princess of the Nightdots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPrincess of the Nightdots

    when words fall



    a wrist dangling

    from the side of this bed

    I make you a

    (because no thing hurts, which has such a small spine)

    I let your heady scent
    invite sunlight
    the prick of your tongue
    call me

    to break for day

    Submitted on 2008-06-21 12:23:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Flowery floaty poetry annoys me... because it's just so gay. And I've observed poets who try to write in this style lose themselves in a crowd of fellow flowery floaty poets, and yes, they all act gay.

    "the heady scent invites sunlight and sour red wine vinegary on your lips"

    There's no poetry in that, only faint association. And if a psychologist asks me what I think to see in some random splatters of ink on a piece of paper I'll tell her that I see faggotry, upon which she'll write down that I express homophobic behavior, as if it's a bad thing.

    Merely 40 years ago homosexuality was the disorder, nowadays homophobia makes you a nutcase. Watching society and attitudes change is fascinating.

    Regardless of what's considered fashionable today, stop writing gay poetry, because an 8 years old could do it with a little bit of training.
    | Posted on 2008-06-25 00:00:00 | by machine dream | [ Reply to This ]
      (because no thing hurts, which has such a small spine)
    really pretty.
    | Posted on 2008-06-21 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]

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