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    dots Submission Name: Dark Night (Part I)dots
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    Author: WhatYouWill
    Elite Ratio:    4.9 - 23/30/17
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       A letter to the darkest of dark nights.


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    dotsDark Night (Part I)dots
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    Dark Night,

    You ensnare me
    With your beautiful languid poems of centuries before
    You befuddle me
    By not letting me see
    My sight belongs to me

    You try to push me
    Off a cliff
    And don’t even watch to see
    Where I fall

    Dark Night,
    I come from you
    From that part
    Deep inside

    So, Night
    Why are you so
    Dark to me?




    Submitted on 2008-06-21 13:47:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What I'm struck by is that this is how I feel about most of the reviews I get on ES. It seems no one "gets me" here. I don't know if that's what you were trying to get across, but if it was - you nailed it!

    Thank you for voicing this if for no other reason than that I was trying to figure out a way to say this myself. I apologize if I've skewed your powerful and poignant words to fit my own situation.

    It is written in beautiful simplicity and I wouldn't change a thing.

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2008-06-21 00:00:00 | by Seagirl | [ Reply to This ]


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