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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Roses dots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 906
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1329



    Description:
       Random short story...just need to write, even if it's something bad


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    dotsFallen Roses dots
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    You stand there, gaping at me,
    Uttering…”I would’ve never guessed it could be you…”

    No, never me.
    Maybe that girl, who wears black polish, with purple roots
    Who gives you death stares when you laugh loudly with your friends,

    Or maybe that boy with the tick, who answers every question
    With a cynical verse, caked in venom,
    For having disrupted him from his book, and from hiding behind his hair:
    His barriers.

    But never me, not me whom you had known for years.

    You stand there gaping at me, and mumble “How could it be you?”
    “I would’ve never guess…”

    This little fact might uproot your whole world.
    Make you forget everything you have known.
    Turn your world around, into something you’re not ready for.

    So you walk out of my life.
    (But not out of the life of your best friend, no you would never do that.)
    You walk out of the life of this girl, this stranger, standing in front of you.

    And I stand there, left without much to say, with “How could it be you?” running over and over and over in my head,
    And tears streaking my cheeks over and over,
    Tasting blood, as thorns sprout from my skin; under shadows of betrayal.




    Submitted on 2008-06-21 13:51:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You are very good at expressing yourself and have a nice repertoire of words to use. Betrayal, pain, sadness, etc, all those feelings in the long run make you stronger... they make you wiser and if you really take it to heart, everything you learn from it will help you with decisions for the rest of your life... you'll be able to read the situation before it happens and not get caught up in the crossfire. I loved the expression of self and the flow. I'll keep reading some of your work but this one just caught my attention big time.

    Never let anyone silence your pen (or keyboard)

    J.J.O.C
    | Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing.
    | Posted on 2008-09-28 00:00:00 | by bananafish | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad...that's all i can really say other than he is an idiot...this was an intense and amazing read...thank you for sharing this with the world...boys can and always will be stupid...(we all know that by now) and no matter what we still love them the same even though we know we are going to get hurt...keep up the writing and i hope that you will have some happier things to write about soon!!!
    Katie
    | Posted on 2008-06-21 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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