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    dots Submission Name: heartbeat of the earthdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsheartbeat of the earthdots
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    See the man in the moon-
    He's a restless tycon,
    Waxing and waning-
    Shrinking and gaining.

    The tide in the ocean-
    Performs a set motion,
    In tune with the gaze-
    Of its lunar phase.

    As today's tide reaches-
    The shores of the beaches,
    The moon in the sky-
    Tells the time on high.

    The daily ebb and flood-
    flows as earthly blood,
    Refreshing each bay-
    Twon times a day.

    Like the breathing of man-
    In God's eternal plan,
    The tide has a berth-
    The heartbeat of Earth.




    Submitted on 2008-06-21 16:47:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this piece. It's ok. Kinda childish but cute.
    "The tide has a berth" This line feels forced though. I think you should rewrite it. I'm sure you can come up with something better. Other than that it's a good poem. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2008-06-22 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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