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    dots Submission Name: Forget and Smile because...dots

    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsForget and Smile because...dots

    Sometimes…Sometimes in life
    People seem close to you
    But then suddenly like a dream
    Everything disappears

    Sometimes…Sometimes life doesn’t seem that fun
    And everyday, every moment is painful
    But that’s when you smile and laugh
    And think that everything’s gonna be okay

    Think about the people around you…
    We cry too when we see tears in your eyes
    So wipe off that frown and smile
    And think that everything’s gonna be okay

    If you are happy, so is everyone else
    The sun sneaks out from behind the clouds
    And shines light upon the world

    Laugh a little
    Or smile, smile and wipe all the worries away

    Submitted on 2008-06-21 20:38:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The sentiment behind this poem is one i've felt, one i've written about, and one i've lived. It was a little too simplistic for me, and I'd prefer a more poetic form instead of how much this reminds me of prose. But in all honesty I think you got your point across perfectly, and the simplicity turns to softness as you read about sun shine and wiping all the worries away.

    | Posted on 2008-06-22 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]

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