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    dots Submission Name: Sitting here waitingdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       it just came out.....i don't really remember how i felt or what i was thinking when i wrote this....it's been awhile


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    dotsSitting here waitingdots
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    The sky, has, fallen upon me now,
    And i'm, still, sitting here waiting.
    With the clouds above my head still churning,
    And, i have grown roots from my feet.
    Tell me if i put my shoes on now would,
    Would the still fit me?

    The sky, has, fallen upon me now
    And, i'm, still, sitting here waiting
    For that something, or nothing
    That's keeping me here
    And, all i want, is one lonely tear
    For that something, or nothing
    That's tearing me down
    Forcing me to fill that, space, in the ground

    And I'm so happy when i speak to me
    And, i get so tired talking in my sleep
    I wake up into a dream with this,
    Lonely feeling all about me

    The sky has fallen upon me now
    And i'm, still, sitting here waiting
    Hopeing no one sees the pain on my face
    Waiting for it all, to just be erased
    And I'm staring at the moon from so far down
    Stuck between illusion of sky and ground

    Well the earth is shaky and i can't stay awake
    I'm fixed on a mirage of what's real and what's fake
    My world is a top what do i do now?
    Well the sky has fallen and i don't know how

    And i'm so happy when i speak to me
    And i get so tired talking in my sleep
    I wake up into another dream
    With this
    Lonely feeling all about me
    so i'm so happy when i speak to me
    And i get so tired talking in my sleep
    And i wake up into a dream with this
    lonely feeling all about me




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