She Cries by MinervaBlu

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Author:	MinervaBlu
ASL Info:	17 nowhere
Elite Ratio:	3.63 - 240/230/178
Words:	131

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	67
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	856

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She Cries dots

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Tears fall onto her pillow
Rapid as the beat of her heart
She sees the cruelty of it all
And it slowly tears her apart
She cries out her bleeding soul
Longing for the beauty that should be
Waiting for everything to come together
So that goodness can be seen

Some wonder why she cries
When she lives a perfect life
they don't understand
She feels the world's strife
The famine, the diese
The murder, the rape
She cries for the victims
Looking to escape

Her heart reaches out to them
Everyday she will pray
It kills her inside not to help
But she can't find a way
Her pillow, drowned in tears
As the world goes on
She cries for this world
Waiting for Evil to be done

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The world's a scary place and can leave us feeling helpless all too often. Nonetheless, I see all the everyday angels who have a kind word and a smile to share and find myself glad to be alive. If I can be that person who does simple little things that makes others smile, perhaps I'm serving my purpose in being alive. Your poem made me think about how important the smallest gesture may be to someone feeling down. Just look what your poem has done! Sharon
| Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
hey, great write! this explains my veiws on today's society and (lack of) humanity quite well.

the rhyme is great, and i cant see any times when it seems forced. the flow is impeccable as well, its to the point, but adds where it needs to.. very nice.

if this is you, i salute your emotions to the state of things, they are not well, and until a hellava lot more people feel the way you and i do, i doubt anything is going to happen. i am an optimist by nature, but its hard to be on this subject.

thanks for summing it up so well, it was a treat to read.

peace.Guermo

oh, btw, stanza 2 line 5.. disease is misspelled :P
| Posted on 2008-06-24 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]

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