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    dots Submission Name: The Death of Countess Brittanydots
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    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    17/f/under your bed
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 90/137/83
    Words: 348
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 63
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2285



    Description:
       the end of an era, my friends, ode to the end of an era, gone long, long ago.


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    dotsThe Death of Countess Brittanydots
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    An almost childlike fascination,
    pallored white in the glittering mortality of her beauty,
    recanting memory after memory,
    obvious was stretched across her blended face
    pale light shades of white streaked down...
    Through the blood,
    the rain drips upon her once rosy lips.
    the taste of crimson squirming alive
    the guilt traced upon this phase of her life
    counting away the wasted time
    Passion exceeded among the actions of a cannibal
    the smell shifts, and turns the acid inside.
    Cold dead face, girl turned corpse like ice.
    it's faded all of her days,
    As the carcass rots away,
    the clouds silvered among the sky,
    as rain washes away the way she died.
    the clouds will soon turn everything gray
    it's a scarlet holiday for suffering decay.
    Gore is painted on the concrete floor,
    There was a sense of a passing dream,
    as it was ripped apart from the seams,
    the death had crawled all over her
    Her sense of fate was gone much sooner
    with anatomy burned and broken,
    skin tattered and her last words unspoken
    The poison shifted through her veins,
    she loved the taste but felt the shame.
    Disfigured love joins with the craving of sex,
    A longing unknown to all of them.
    Lust cut out her heart, and nailed beside-
    paralyzed, burning, and dead inside.
    smiles did not color her wasted last day,
    Tarnished, her soul scrapes at the bars on the cage,
    the corpses rise and close in,
    twisting, grasping, all about her,
    They are only judging her sins.
    There is no one to hear the sounds
    she screams, knowing, waiting for more.
    Sparks trip, as her house burns down.
    her corpse waiting, quivers on the floor-
    insinuates her love one last time
    and hopes that this hell is only in her mind.
    'I love you' ends her with a murder and death,
    Buried inside a horrible mess
    Sun shining past the graveyard shades
    as for the faithful light of day
    Nothing could have saved her except-
    A little more love
    and a lot less regret.






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