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    dots Submission Name: I Wanted....dots
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    Author: sweet_rayne
    ASL Info:    25/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 493/464/111
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 943
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 326



    Description:
       a work in progress, it needs more but im not sure what, helpful suggestions would be great


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    dotsI Wanted....dots
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    I wanted you
    To tease and touch

    I wanted you
    To kiss and taste

    I needed you
    To take what was offered

    I wanted you
    To make me whole

    I needed you
    To take me to paradise

    I trusted you
    To make it right




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    ||| Comments |||
      Evocative, and well written. Intersting concept of wanting and needing. Are they one and the same, or are there differences between them ?

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-03-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      you speaking to that special person with compassion to show how deep you are with them. good piece. Keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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