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    dots Submission Name: The Foxdots
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    Author: Roselise
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe Foxdots
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    What do I hear, quietly running,
    Scarlet, white and very cunning,
    It looks at me with piercing eyes,
    Creeping, hiding, telling lies,

    Silent as a falling leaf,
    Moves the furry, clever thief,
    Carrying a feathered hen,
    To a secret, hidden den,

    It stops being on the run,
    After darkness swallows sun,
    Slowly, slowly power reaching,
    Eyes are burning, whiskers twitching




    Submitted on 2008-06-23 12:24:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an absolutely superb poem! Excellent! Wonderful! First class rhyme and meter throughout! I loved it, loved it, loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-06-23 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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