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    dots Submission Name: Teen Seasondots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    ASL Info:    47 Female New England
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 170/211/66
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Rant/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 837



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       ...this too, shall pass.


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    dotsTeen Seasondots
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    Determined to dissolve his delusional life,
    I bought him a pocket calendar today.
    Cover blank, blocks barren.
    Spaced-out and empty.
    A panoramic portrayal of his image.
    Apparently, a parents' impertinent impression.

    Pride-punched,
    he plucked the pages one-by-one!
    Ceremoniously he crushed them
    with fists of combat fury.

    (Illustrations are not his forte.)

    Realizing his clear conquest
    he looked up with a wide,
    blue-eyed smile
    then reached deep down
    inside the pocket of his chained
    black pants. Provoked,
    he kindled his way-kewl Zippo.

    Side by side in idle silence
    we gazed at his fiery execution
    as failed fantasies blazed
    in a flaming revolt.




    Submitted on 2008-06-23 14:20:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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