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    dots Submission Name: It tastes like Gindots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    20/m/il
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 90/46/50
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 50
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsIt tastes like Gindots
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    She's a car crash waiting to happen.
    All alcohol and sex.
    I want trace her body with my fingertips.

    Her pretty make-up is always
    smeared on like a happy clown.
    What a smile!
    Soon it'll be on a million bits
    of glass, stretching the next mile.

    Her panties, soaked,
    lay in the floorboard between her legs.
    She's been fucked, she got lucky.
    It was her friend's old man,
    No jealousy, sharing is caring.

    They'll scrape her off the concrete tomorrow.
    All blonde hair, legs, and cunt.
    She coulda been my baby.
    My baby strapped in at midnight alive,
    drunk enough to fuck,
    too drunk to drive.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Hm. Literally a car crash waiting to happen. Not just as a figure of speech. Huh.

    (yeah, yeah. screw eloquence... dunno what to say to this.)

    I do know I can say this:

    it's messy and ugly and there's a sort of... bah. Whatever.

    I read it.
    I dig it.
    End of story.

    Have a wonderful day.
    | Posted on 2008-06-25 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]


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