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    dots Submission Name: My Best Friend....dots
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    Author: Toxic_Rayne
    ASL Info:    18/f/a happier place
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 1314/1095/162
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       Man's best friend.


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    dotsMy Best Friend....dots
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    My best friend; always there to make me laugh;
    To listen, to cry, to live, just to be.
    If you harm me, oh her wrath, for
    her rage is the deadliest thing to see.
    My best friend, my guardian, loving and
    ever kind. When life gets rough she's always
    there; to support me when I cannot stand.
    Though she gets older with each pass of days
    I cherish every single breath taken.
    Each day is a gift spent in her prescence,
    a flash of paradise that is given,
    each bark, every growl, like tiny presents.
    How odd, the people think, that last verse was.
    the wonders the friendship of a dog does.




    Submitted on 2008-06-24 02:18:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ha sad i almost thought thia was about me..... so sad but kyrah is a good friend to lol
    | Posted on 2008-06-24 00:00:00 | by supergirl_in_oh | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice tribute to a pet. i see you mostly stayed to pentameter except for line three, But the two commas can be considered as compensation for meter. The last line's rhyme seems strained . Perhaps it could be: the wonders of friendship that a dog does. The present line says that friendship does instead of the dog doing it.
    | Posted on 2008-06-24 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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