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    dots Submission Name: Desperationdots
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    Author: Roselize
    Elite Ratio:    2.92 - 21/26/19
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       When I wrote this I wasn't depressed at all. So no worries, I don't really feel that way.


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    dotsDesperationdots
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    Shattered, broken, blown away,
    Desperate, cold and gone astray,
    Let my icy grave be red,
    Let me smile ere I am dead,

    Let me scream and let me shout,
    Let me let my feelings out,
    Don't remember, Don't forget,
    Don't be glad and don't regret,

    Shattered broken blown away,
    Desperate cold and gone astray,
    Never ask me why I write,
    Let me fade into the night




    Submitted on 2008-06-24 07:53:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent, even perfect meter!! First class rhyme! Some folks write for years and years and can't do this! I loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it! BRavo!! Bravo!!! BRAVO!!! michael
    | Posted on 2008-06-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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