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    dots Submission Name: contiguousdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Jumping across
    the space between buildings
    hearts clench
    with finality; destiny
    an end of sorts
    right below flailing legs
    desperate for foundation
    beneath of the soles of their
    worn shoes
    blood races from the heart’s
    ventricles
    pumping, pushing,
    imploring the body to reach forth
    and grasp the concept
    of being contiguous -
    a run without spaces
    an end without obstacles
    a calm walk
    across the tops of
    millions of buildings; connected
    .... “Did you make it home okay last night?”
    says your muffled voice into my hair
    “No trouble
    at all,” I say.




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