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    dots Submission Name: Stoneddots
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    Author: DorianGrymstone
    ASL Info:    23/male/West Hills
    Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 8/11/13
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    The metamorphosing effect that you have within my mind is unparallel to any other. The sweet taste that you bequeath upon my taste buds sends me into an upward euphoric spiral that puts me into a painful void. As I breathe the fire into my lungs my mind becomes lighter than a feather and I can truly feel the plethora of sensations that my senses can obtain. This elated body sensation is a pleasure loaded orgasm full of vigorous moments with overloads of mental and physical jubilation. What you do for me is … “Uh, shit, I’ve lost my train of thought, oh well I’m stoned.”




    Submitted on 2008-06-24 22:24:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      LMFAO @ THE LAST LINE! This is great. I've never been high but this sure does sound like the feeling everyone describes being high as.

    "lighter then a feather" then should be than in that case. When you're comparing something, you use "than". When you're talking about anything else, you use "then". For example...

    1. I'm taller THAN Leah.
    2. And THEN I went to the mall.

    Also, you could use a few commas in there. But otherwise, I love it.
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by riotgrrl1881 | [ Reply to This ]



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