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an arms race in your sk(prison)in

Author: silentpoison
ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204 /259 /118
Words: 201
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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an arms race in your sk(prison)in

We're losing signs of life
no more laughter
or heartfelt sighs
we are the children of what
they create
starting WWIII
using us as ammo
in the newest arms race
coutries colliding
and freedoms in hiding
it's canada's cold war
and bomb shells are creating
shelters underground
just for safe keeping
ideals falling like acid rain
for our eating
consumption of lies
chewing through family ties
while umbilical cords choking
as we deepthroat your religion
we smother it in smoke
cause your lungs are collapsing
you're breathing in ignorance
and shitting out your free mind
they'll sensor your hands
so the deaf go unnoticed
droves screaming out-loud
but no ones stays focused
take a deep breathe
and fog up this paper
is your vision just blurring
or are we all sinking deeper
Sucking it dry for 10 bucks an hour
it Came to
and went limp
like you've been drinking for days
cause time passes by
and we're living 9-5
taking it hard
just to live
just to survive

Submitted on 2008-06-25 01:45:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I honestly think that this is amazing. The pictures painted by the words are perfect, which is what I believe the writter is supposed to do. this sucked my in from beginning to end.
"we smother it in smoke
cause your lungs are collapsing
you're breathing in ignorance
and [censored]ting out your free mind" was my favorite part of this whole peice, it just stuck in my brain who blatantly ignorant so many people are. keep it up...
~Darkest Flaw~
| Posted on 2008-07-01 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
  Excellent, Excellent. i think you just made it into my favorites, with this piece of art. All the symbolism and metaphors just really hit home with this piece it's totally original and totally inspiring. Good work!
| Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]

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