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    dots Submission Name: an arms race in your sk(prison)indots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsan arms race in your sk(prison)indots
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    We're losing signs of life
    no more laughter
    or heartfelt sighs
    we are the children of what
    they create
    starting WWIII
    using us as ammo
    in the newest arms race
    coutries colliding
    and freedoms in hiding
    it's canada's cold war
    and bomb shells are creating
    shelters underground
    just for safe keeping
    ideals falling like acid rain
    for our eating
    consumption of lies
    chewing through family ties
    while umbilical cords choking
    as we deepthroat your religion
    we smother it in smoke
    cause your lungs are collapsing
    you're breathing in ignorance
    and shitting out your free mind
    they'll sensor your hands
    so the deaf go unnoticed
    droves screaming out-loud
    but no ones stays focused
    take a deep breathe
    and fog up this paper
    is your vision just blurring
    or are we all sinking deeper
    Sucking it dry for 10 bucks an hour
    it Came to
    and went limp
    like you've been drinking for days
    cause time passes by
    and we're living 9-5
    taking it hard
    just to live
    just to survive




    Submitted on 2008-06-25 01:45:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I honestly think that this is amazing. The pictures painted by the words are perfect, which is what I believe the writter is supposed to do. this sucked my in from beginning to end.
    "we smother it in smoke
    cause your lungs are collapsing
    you're breathing in ignorance
    and [censored]ting out your free mind" was my favorite part of this whole peice, it just stuck in my brain who blatantly ignorant so many people are. keep it up...
    ~Darkest Flaw~
    | Posted on 2008-07-01 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent, Excellent. i think you just made it into my favorites, with this piece of art. All the symbolism and metaphors just really hit home with this piece it's totally original and totally inspiring. Good work!
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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